Paerata school

On Friday the 26th of June 2015 I posted a blog comment to Paerata school. In the next four weeks we are doing something called Quad blogging and if you don't know what it is, it's when you comment on peoples blogs from other schools. There are 4 clusters of schools that blog on each others blogs. This is my comment I did to them. 

(Draft 2) 5.6.15 DHP Speedwrite Proof read: the twinkling stars at night

NAME: Denzal DATE: 5.6.15

SPEEDWRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title: The twinkling stars at night
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	yes
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information	yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes

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Begin Writing Here:

The twinkling stars at night

Have you ever heard a myth(how raven stole the sun)about the stars when you were little because I have. I have just learnt in school what the lifecycle of stars is. I have also just learnt that the sun is one of the smallest stars in our solar system.

Information about the stars

Stars have lots of great things about them and I am going to tell you three things you probably didn’t know about them. When stars are first born they have to battle with the gravity to stay in the air. Stars are normally one to ten billion years old. My last fact about stars is that there are 40 billion in five billion galaxies.

Appearance

Stars are made by their black bodies. Did you, know that the second brightest star in the whole solar system  is one of the smallest stars in our solar system and that’s the sun. There are lots of stars in the sky but not all of them you can see. When the stars are shining down they do not give out enough steady light.  

Types of stars

The sun is a dwarf star,  The biggest star in our solar system can make it’s own huge galaxy.have you ever wondered what a shooting stars is, shooting star isn’t a star it is really a meteor that is flying through the night sky. An did you know that a exploding star, supernova , can generate shock waves so powerful that they compress a nearby nebular.

Life cycle

For a star to be born it needs a clump of dust and gas which is called Nebulae. When the stars are red giants they form a supergiant then they pleasure into a blackhole. Did you know that the sun is 5 billion years old.The force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light can escape it.

I hope you have learnt something from this information report and it encourages you to write you own. If you want some more information on the stars you can look at my friends at hay park blogs thank you for reading.

4/6/15 DHP Speedwrite: The twinkling stars at night

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title: The twinkling stars at night
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	yes
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information	yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes

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Begin Writing Here:

[Introduction]

Have you ever heard a myth(how raven stole the sun)about the stars when you were little because I have. I have just learnt in school what the lifecycle of stars are. I have also just learnt that the sun is one of the smallest star in our solar system.

[Paragraph 1 - Information about the stars]

Stars have lots of great things about them and I am going to tell you three things you probably didn't know about them. When stars are first born they have to have a battle with the gravity to stay in the air. Stars are normally one to ten billion years old. My last fact about stars is that there are 400,000,000,000 in 5,000,000,000 galaxies.

[Paragraph 2 - Appearance]

Stars are made by their black bodies. Did you, know that the second brightest star in the whole solar system  is one of the smallest stars in our solar system and that’s the sun. There are lots of stars in the sky but not all of them you can see. When the stars are shining down they do not give out enough steady light.  

[Paragraph 3 - Types of stars]

The sun is a sun is a dwarf planet in our solar system. The biggest star in our solar system can make it’s own huge galaxy. Did you know that a shooting star isn’t a star it is really a meteor that is flying through that night sky. An exploding star,supernova, can generate shock waves so powerful that they compress a nearby nebular.

[Paragraph 4- Life cycle]

For a star to be born it needs a clump of dust and gas which is called Nebulae. When the stars are red giants they form a supergiant then they pleasure into a blackhole. Did you know that the sun is 5 billion years old.The force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light can escape it.

[Conclusion]

I hope you have learnt something from this information report and encourages you to write you own. If you want some more information on the stars you can look at my friends at hay parks blogs thank you for reading.